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last night I made a man
out of pillows and forgotten
fragments of clothes
we’d pushed into my drawers.
I held my pillow-man’s hand
and made sure he wasn’t too warm
because it is summer;
I’m on the second floor;
and that was always your
biggest complaint.

this morning I tried to shower
but would turn off the water and run
like a soapy dog, complete with
loyal tail wagging, to the door
thinking you’d come knocking.
You hadn’t.

tomorrow will taste like
the food of a week ago
and I’ll wear sunglasses,
which, if you know me,
(and you do)
will seem out of context
and like a little girl
playing dress up.

I know there are supposed to be
thunderstorms, perfect
radio love songs, movies with Meg
Ryan and wondering when we’ll meet
again,
but God
doesn't budge on the details.
I dont write love poems.

And I'm not editing this, so dont bother critiquing it.
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Given 2005-07-07
Love Poem by ~WhoKilledKirov

They left you. It's been a week. Their scent is still present in the pillows. What do you do? Love Poem by ~WhoKilledKirov. Read it. Love it. Cry a little. ( Suggested by livingbyair and Featured by ndifference )
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QueenlyQueer Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017
I'm just shook this is so good 😘
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QueenlyQueer Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2017
You make me want write books and
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fuck-youverymuch Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I'm back here again. Reading this poem after another break-up. I don't think I've ever read anything that sums it up so perfectly :'(
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chessqueen83 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed "God doesn't budge details"
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chessqueen83 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*on
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positivitize Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
Oh. Yeah.

this fucking poem, dude:
9 years later and I still really love it. 
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sappyforest Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
This reminds me of a song I once heard.
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ChaoticM3thod Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013
why not edit? great art is borne of ceaseless alteration.. Just ask F. Scott Fitzgerald.
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Sunrayelle Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well sometimes great art is not the goal. Just self-expression, pure and simple, and changing the original form may slightly alter what you wanted it to represent.
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Sir-Legit Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
A girl asked a guy if he thought she was pretty and
he
said no. She asked him if he would want to be with her forever and
he
said no. She then asked him if she were to leave would he cry, and
............once
again he replied with a no. She had heard enough. As she walked... See Moreaway, tears streaming down her f......ace the...
... See Moreboy grabbed her arm and said.... You're not pretty
you're beautiful. Idon't want to be with you forever. I NEED to be
with you forever. And Iwouldn't cry if you walked away...I'd die...
♥♥ ~~THE END~~ ♥♥.......Isn't that sweet? Tonight at midnight your
true love willrealize they like you. Something good will happen to
you at 1:00-4:00pm tomorrow, it could be anywhere on IM or email,
outside of school,anywhere! Get ready for the biggest shock of your
life. If you breakthis chain letter you will be cursed with 10
relationship problems forthe next ten years. If you post this to 15
pages in 15 minutes, you're safe.
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Gladddragon Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Digital Artist
its fine the way it is..been there..just did that the other day in fact put clothes on a pillow to help me with seperation anxiety..
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OnyxiusART Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
GAHHHH this is perfect.
This poem is perfect, the voice is perfect-
I LOVE YOU.



F'reals, though. Blew my mind.
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Daystar-Art Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, it's feature time: [link]
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JChairez Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012
I love this. Nothing else to say. It's wonderful just the way it is.
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the first four lines are the best, but the poem is overall just epic. :)
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Shadows-in-Twilight Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
straight into the heart ... full of pain :(
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zo8rox88 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
amazing
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songbird264 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Student Writer
Its good the way it is
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avery23 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012
I've had this poem bookmarked for about 2 years now, and even now I still am moved by how simple, yet real, the emotions and imagery are in this piece. Thank you for such art.
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SuicideNoteXIII Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
A girl asked a guy if he thought she was pretty and
he
said no. She asked him if he would want to be with her forever and
he
said no. She then asked him if she were to leave would he cry, and
............once
again he replied with a no. She had heard enough. As she walked... See Moreaway, tears streaming down her f......ace the...
... See Moreboy grabbed her arm and said.... You're not pretty
you're beautiful. Idon't want to be with you forever. I NEED to be
with you forever. And Iwouldn't cry if you walked away...I'd die...
♥♥ ~~THE END~~ ♥♥.......Isn't that sweet? Tonight at midnight your
true love willrealize they like you. Something good will happen to
you at 1:00-4:00pm tomorrow, it could be anywhere on IM or email,
outside of school,anywhere! Get ready for the biggest shock of your
life. If you breakthis chain letter you will be cursed with 10
relationship problems forthe next ten years. If you post this to 15
pages in 15 minutes, you're safe.
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GoWeegie Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
HOw sweet...
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Julieeelovesdesmin Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012
really like this
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Miss-Meesha Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
Wow! Beautiful and so moving!
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yami-joey Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Student General Artist
whoa... ^^ a poetry on Popular !
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trixief98 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011
U have inspiered me now I will have to write one of my own :)
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hotkiss29jessica Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011
I really like this one, I read it like 4 times already
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immortalfan Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
That was... Beautiful
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stichesBodyBagTtags Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This inspires me
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ElisabethDarling Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011   General Artist
I really like this a lot.
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chilenojoon Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011
This is so good! I really felt those emotions. Thank you for writing this.
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originalninjajesus Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011
I like it :)
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Greywin Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm, this seems different from when i last read it. I think i liked it better before. Still good though
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David-Davidson Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2011
This doesn't need critique. It's perfect as is. Well done.
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JeanChr1stophe Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2011
Dont like it
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Sarah-the-writer Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2011
Wow...you just kind of get how to do this, whether you do it intentionally or not. Seriously. One of the better pieces I've found here.
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kbuckm Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
For someone who doesn't write love poems you do it well :) it touched my heart
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dielinda7 Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
I am so angry...this is actually by e.e. cummings. unfortunately I can't prove it with a link from the internet, but I am sure it is. I found it a couple of years ago when I looked for another poem (I carry your heart)....anyone who ever read a poem by him has to admit its the same style! shame on yoiu
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WhoKilledKirov Featured By Owner May 11, 2011
I hear e.e. cummings LOVES meg ryan.
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annie3rg Featured By Owner May 2, 2011
This is wonderful. I'm not even a big fan of poetry in general. I'm more of a prose person, but this is pretty gorgeous. My compliments.
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multicolored Featured By Owner May 2, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I come back to this poem more often than I'd like to admit. thank you for writing this. :heart:
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MrKurt15 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011
Yup, that feeling seems familiar. Great work :)
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AvengedInTheEnd11 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2011  Student Writer
>.< I love it...and your confidence in noy changing it XD
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing! Wonderful imagery, and so much emotion. This is fantastic.
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detrixx1 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Wow....Honestly this is absolutely breathtaking to me. I love when poetry is real, and shows the true normality of things like someone you love leaving you. love love love it! keep em coming!
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Whatlovelynarhwals Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011   Photographer
Absolutely beautiful. No words to really describe it. :]
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