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We'll always have Steinbeck by ~WhoKilledKirov:iconWhoKilledKirov:



Iron my fingertips
against the crease of the seam,
and scrawl on the envelope
an ambiguous address.

When the last multi-hued
string of our friendship bracelet
frayed- peeled apart like uncoiled
copper wires-
Could have sworn I felt the wear
with every fruitless search;
you refuse to stay in one place.

They tell me you dream of Hawaii.
And a quick handed 200 dollars
Makes for easy deliberation.
I hope you’ll drop me a line
Before you take off for paradise.

Remember when we sat on the hills
and saw small brown children
throwing and catching,
And you said nothing was ever as beautiful
As the way the ball bounced.

You might have been high
But I thought it was deep all the same.
And I quoted John Steinbeck
(drank the poison, fell in the trap)
And the figures of Cannery Row-
(You are a dead ringer for Doc)

Believing someday I’ll see
The product of your effective
Boot-strap-pulled-up maneuver.
And I’ll wait here, while you
String shells on a thread,
knowing you are worth something.

After all-
Paradise doesn’t stay light
In the evening,
And homeless is homeless everywhere.
Regret is just as common, and
I know you can’t take another night
of waking with that gold-eyed tiger
on your stomach.
©2004-2010 ~WhoKilledKirov
:iconwhokilledkirov:

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In a world ruled by tigers........

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Given 2005-01-30

We'll always have Steinbeck by ~WhoKilledKirov

A dialogue with someone unseen, someone far away - and I say "dialogue" because it is rarely this vivid or intimately crafted. This is a story that holds weight. A story any of us could have - perhaps yet unwritten, but this piece tells it in an elaborate, inviting way. (Suggested by `krissie and Featured by `ndifference)

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:iconninjakitty104:
OO...I love it!! ^_^

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Everything always happens for a reason...when I find out what that reason is I'll let you know. ^.^
:iconwombatical:
Its a great poem with a solid voice and a cohesive narrative thread; very impressive.

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silvery light glints on fork and paper knives slow like butter smooth switch to a position more familiar on the rug, slept like dust mites dried and hanging on the fabric
:iconwhokilledkirov:
thanks baby-kitty-mine :glomp:
:iconwhokilledkirov:
thank you, I appreciate it :)
:icontherealbombshell:
NICE.


these lines really stood out:

When the last string of
my friendship bracelet broke,
I had no where to send the replacement-
You aren’t the type of man
Who sits still in one place.

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so THAT's where all the cool kids are hanging out... *bombshells
:iconkaujot:
I really dug the first stanza.

"When the last string of
my friendship bracelet broke,
I had no where to send the replacement-
You aren’t the type of man
Who sits still in one place."

- This read really awkward for me, and I'm still uncertain about it.

I'm a bit strapped for time, but that's the first impression. Overall, very solid. Remind me and I'll be back to further delve into this one.

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This never happened. It will shock you how much it never happened.
:iconquietrune:
look! i found my way here!..

the imagery is wonderful Em...and solid is a good word to describe the overall feel.
:iconlivingbyair:
I like your voice though I feel distant.

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